I think most of my issues here are simply not fixable because they're the core of the level, in some way. I really don't think a level of this theme and style works with this song and that's just something that's going to drag it down for me no matter what.

I found the level itself to be nice and I like the narrative it takes but it also comes off as too formulaic to feel like it has said narrative. I'm particularly referring to the use of text and again, the very little song progression that just doesn't work for a level of this kind. It feels more like a themed level rather than it telling a story, but because it's supposed to tell that story the theme isn't really felt.